求助帮忙修改两篇英语作文~急！！！
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本帖被 左。微希 执行加亮操作(2012-02-22)
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某只了解自己的英语作文水平很差~也许是非常差！[s:273][s:273][s:273]所以来坛子求助大家的帮忙了！[s:258][s:252][s:252]
Dear my past self
I am now studying in Xiamen University and I am satisfied with my present conditions actually. This university has a good environment and I can develop my dream easily. I also can arrange times. It is very good for my mental and body.
It is without doubt that you are standing the important crossroads. So you have the positive attitude to face the study life. You have some study ways, there are many useful ways of this, such as preparing the course, always to find the answer when you are confused and plan a time list.
The one thing that is clear you will have significant impart for me. On the one hand, I developed a habit for using time list to waste time.
Because of this, I always have spare time to do anything what I want .On another hand; I have some bad habits .It brings about bad effect on my life. You really need to work hard and it is a long-time solution to a long-term study problem. You should change the bad habits. People are noticing the same things that good habits are a good start towards a better future.
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As is reported in the first half of 2010 over 70,000fires broke out nationwide causing 656 deaths and 271 injures. The terrible fire of last November in Jing’s a District, Shanghai also claimed 53 lives.
While a fire happens, we really need to stay clam. It is without doubt that we have a hope to survive. One way to find the suitable point and get out as possible. What can we wet a clothes and cover it over your mouth and nose before rushing out. Another important thing to keeping close to the floor finds the way out. If the door is surrounded with fire and you are on the first floor or second floor, you can try to climb out through the window. But if you are in third floor, you had better not to jump may lead to injure. Thy need to learn more knowledge about safe problems, but the good truth is that people realized the importance of safety. Safety are a good start towards a better future.
【捂脸】~~超级丢脸的说啊~~
Dear my past self
I am now studying in Xiamen University and I am satisfied with my present conditions actually. This university has a good environment and I can develop my dream easily. I also can arrange times. It is very good for my mental and body.
It is without doubt that you are standing the important crossroads. So you have the positive attitude to face the study life. You have some study ways, there are many useful ways of this, such as preparing the course, always to find the answer when you are confused and plan a time list.
The one thing that is clear you will have significant impart for me. On the one hand, I developed a habit for using time list to waste time.
Because of this, I always have spare time to do anything what I want .On another hand; I have some bad habits .It brings about bad effect on my life. You really need to work hard and it is a long-time solution to a long-term study problem. You should change the bad habits. People are noticing the same things that good habits are a good start towards a better future.
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As is reported in the first half of 2010 over 70,000fires broke out nationwide causing 656 deaths and 271 injures. The terrible fire of last November in Jing’s a District, Shanghai also claimed 53 lives.
While a fire happens, we really need to stay clam. It is without doubt that we have a hope to survive. One way to find the suitable point and get out as possible. What can we wet a clothes and cover it over your mouth and nose before rushing out. Another important thing to keeping close to the floor finds the way out. If the door is surrounded with fire and you are on the first floor or second floor, you can try to climb out through the window. But if you are in third floor, you had better not to jump may lead to injure. Thy need to learn more knowledge about safe problems, but the good truth is that people realized the importance of safety. Safety are a good start towards a better future.
【捂脸】~~超级丢脸的说啊~~
