【English Corner】长期活动① 纠错贴

美丽的句子 漂亮的翻译
http://m.paipai.fm/r6201116/
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承诺常常很像蝴蝶,美丽的飞盘旋然后不见

Promises are often like the butterfly, which disappear after beautiful hover.

--> Promises are often like butterflies which disappear after hovering beautifully.

为什么幸福总是擦肩而过,偶尔想你的时候….就让….回忆来陪我.

Why I have never catched the happiness? Whenever I want you ,I will be accompanyed by the memory of...

--> Why does happiness always brush past me unnoticed? Memories accompany me whenever I think of you.

如果你为着错过夕阳而哭泣，那么你就要错群星了

If you weeped for the missing sunset,you would miss all the shining stars

--> If you cry for the sunset you've missed, then you would miss all the shining stars.

宁愿笑著流泪,嘢不哭著说后悔 心碎了,还需再补吗？

I would like weeping with the smile rather than repenting with the cry,when my heart is broken ,is it needed to fix?

--> I rather weep then a smile than cry with regret. Is there a need to fix my broken heart?

在回忆里继续梦幻不如在地狱里等待天堂

Dreaming in the memory is not as good as waiting for the paradise in the hell

--> To continue a dream in memories is worse than waiting for paradise in hell.

就先说这些吧。太多了我改不来，呵呵，给我送钱送分的帖子。先感谢了。

接着改-ING

美丽的句子 漂亮的翻译
http://m.paipai.fm/r6201116/
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爱情…在指缝间承诺 指缝….在爱情下交缠.
Love ,promised between the fingers
Finger rift,twisted in the love
--> Love... a promise made between fingers. Our fingers... clasp together in love.


谁捡走了我的玻璃鞋,寻找遗失的玻璃鞋.
I am looking for the missing glass-shoes who has picked it up
--> Who found my glass slippers, I am looking for my lost glass slippers.


假如每次想起你我都会得到一朵鲜花，那么我将永远在花丛中徜徉。
If I had a single flower for every time I think about you, I could walk forever in my garden.
--> If I had a single flower each time I thought of you, then I would walk forever in my garden.


如果没有相等的爱，那就让我爱多一些吧。
If equal affection cannot be, let the more loving be me.
--> If there is no equality in love, then let me love more.


治疗爱的创伤唯有加倍地去爱。
There is no remedy for love but to love more.
--> The only way to cure one wounded by love is to love more.

好像。。。这里是无限的PPB金库。。。怎无人来改？

American Idiom mp3
http://m.paipai.fm/r6213564/
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5.    S surefire way to do something
--> 5. A surefire way to do something

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Paul: Doc,my toe’s killingme. I think it’s broken.
--> Paul: Doc,my toe’s killing me. I think it’s broken.

Paul: I was helpingmy brothermove. I dropped a desk on my foot.
-->Paul: I was helping my brother move. I dropped a desk on my foot.

Paul: Yeah . . . I was trying to fix the toilet and got my hand stuck. I yanked it out, and hurt myself. I’mstill trying to live that one down.
--> Paul: Yeah . . . I was trying to fix the toilet and got my hand stuck. I yanked it out, and hurt myself. I’m still trying to live that one down.

我不想再贴了。整篇文章多处出现缺少空格的问题。贴这片亲还是小心检查吧。

世界著名影片中求婚经典句集萃（双语）
http://m.paipai.fm/r6198888/
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Will you marry me? I’d make a good husband, jenny. I’m not a smart man, but I know what love is.
--> Will you marry me? I’d make a good husband, Jenny. I’m not a smart man, but I know what love is.

英语一些很礼貌的交际口语
http://m.paipai.fm/r6210992
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3. Don’t take it to heart. 别往心里去，别为此而忧虑伤神。
生活实例：his test isn’t that important. Don’t takeit to heart.
--> This test isn’t that important. Don’t take it to heart.

俞敏洪说：背完这100个句子，你已经背过7000个单词（转）
http://m.paipai.fm/r6214219
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1. Typical of the grassland dwellers of the continent is the American antelope, or pronghorn.
--> The American antelope, or Pronghorn, is a typical grassland animal found in the mainland.

2. Of the millions who saw Haley’s comet in 1986, how many people will live long enough to see it return in the twenty-first century.
-->2. Of the millions who saw Haley’s comet in 1986, how many people will live long enough to see it return in the twenty-first century?

5. In group to remain in existence, a profit-making organization must, in the long run, produce something consumers consider useful or desirable.
--> Any profit-making organization that wants to survive must ultimately produce something that consumers consider desirable or useful.

怎都是我一个人在改？奖励太低了不吸引人？

英語學習必看！
http://m.paipai.fm/r6207533#14814125

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27. Now, it is generally accepted that no college or university can educate its students by the time they graduation.
** It's wrong to use “by the time they graduation”, it can be replaced by “by the time they graduate” or “ by the time of their graduation” or simply “ by their graduation”.

34. In view of such serious situation, environmental tools of transportation like bicycle are more important than any time before.
考慮到這些嚴重的狀況，我們比以往任何時候更需要像自行車這樣的環保型交通工具。
** The word “environmental” does not imply the idea of environmentally friendly. Instead of “環保型”, it means”環境的”. Here, the word “environmentally friendly” or “green” can be used.

56. These days, people in growing numbers are beginning to complain that work is more stressful and less leisurely than in past.
** The writer tries to compare the work in the past with the job people doing nowadays. So, “than THAT in the past” should be used. Don't forget the word “that”! :D

100. As for me, it is essential to know, at first, what kind of problems young students possible would encounter on campus.
**Instead of using "possible", the word "possibly" should be used.


這篇corrections原先已獲獎勵5分，
我現在是厚著臉來拿剩餘的15分。 >w<

p.s. 我猜沒人來不是因為獎勵太低了不吸引人，而是因為這在這帖和文章原址2邊走不太方便罷了。
      改錯Post直接貼在原Post下邊，改錯者再來這邊貼reference(如link和樓層資料)不是更User-friendly嗎？

一個母親一生撒的8個謊言
http://m.paipai.fm/r6198850#14911490
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1. heh  i want to find some friends hahhhhhhh

  (http://m.paipai.fm/r6198123_u10798651/)





heh  hello  everybody!i fell(should be ‘feel’) so boring(should be ‘bored’) now,so i want o(should be ‘to’)  find some friends  hahhhh

first  he or she must be friendly  and like to chat (should be ‘chatting’)and so on>>>>>>>>>>

heh  that is all!

if you want to make friends with me    pls tell me how to find you or you can add me (^on) qq and say who are you(should be ‘who you are’)  my qq (^number) is 316025525 

hehh    ths everyone!

美丽的句子 漂亮的翻译
http://m.paipai.fm/r6201116/
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1.我的世界不允许你的消失，不管结局是否完美.
No matter the ending is perfect or not, you cannot disappear from my world.
---->You can't disappear from my world whether the ending is perfect or not.

2.爱情是一个精心设计的谎言。
Love is a carefully designed lie.
---->Love is a lie designed carefully.

3.承诺常常很像蝴蝶,美丽的飞盘旋然后不见
Promises are often like the butterfly, which disappear after beautiful hover
---->Promises are often like butterflies, which disappear after beautiful hover.

4.凋谢是真实的 盛开只是一种过去
Fading is true while flowering is past
---->Wither is true while flowering is past.

5.为什么幸福总是擦肩而过,偶尔想你的时候….就让….回忆来陪我.
Why I have never catched the happiness? Whenever I want you ,I will be accompanyed by the memory of...
---->Why have I never catched the happiness? Whenever I want you ,I will be accompanyed by the memory of...

6.爱情…在指缝间承诺 指缝….在爱情下交缠.
Love, promised between the fingers
Finger rift, twisted in the love
---->Love, promised among the fingers
Finger rift, twisted in the love

7.如果你为着错过夕阳而哭泣，那么你就要错过群星了
If you weeped for the missing sunset, you would miss all the shining stars
---->If you weeped for the missing sunset, then you would miss all the shining stars

8.感受梦的火焰，感觉飞舞瞬间，当一切浪漫遥远，永恒依然
to feel the flame of dreaming and to feel the moment of dancing,when all the romance is far away,the eternity is always there
---->to feel the dream of the flame and to feel the moment of dancing, when all the romance is far away, the eterniy is always there

9.__________________茹菓只遈遇见,吥能停畱,吥茹吥遇见/.
If we can only encounter each other rather than stay with each other,then I wish we had never encountered
----> If we can only encounter each other rather than stay with each other,then I wish we never encountered

10.宁愿笑著流泪,嘢不哭著说后悔 心碎了,还需再补吗？
I would like weeping with the smile rather than repenting with the cry,when my heart is broken ,is it needed to fix?
---->I would like to weep with smile rather than repent with cry,when my heart is broken, is it needed to fix?

11.天空没有翅膀的痕迹，而鸟儿已飞过
There are no trails of the wings in the sky, while the birds has flied away.
---->There are no traces of wings in the sky, while birds has flied away.

12.与你保持着一种暖昧的关系,怕自己会爱上你,怕你离开后,我会流泪
When keeping the ambiguity with you, I fear I will fall in love with you, and I fear I will cry after your leaving.
---->When I keep the ambiguity with you, I fear I will fall in love with you, and cry after your leaving.

13.当香烟爱上(_火柴时,就注定受到伤害
When a cigarette falls in love with a match, it is destined to be hurt
---->When a cigarette falls in love with a match, the former is destined to be hurt

14.噎兲发觉ャ除了爱ωǒ什嚒都未囿
I found one day that I had nothing except the love
---->One day I found that I had nothing except the love

15.人活着 总是要得罪一些人的 就要看那些人是否值得得罪
When alive ,we may probably offend some people.However, we must think about whether they are deserved offended.
---->When alive, we probably offend some people. However, we must think about whether they are deserved to be offended.
未完待续…………

這樣說或許很沒禮貌，
但樓上的真的是在改錯嗎？
我看來覺得改得很不必要，其實很多跟本沒有錯吧
如：1,2,3,4,7,11,12,13,14,15，是不必要的改正。
如：6,8,9,10,，則是本來沒錯，改成錯。

男性真的比女性聪明吗 ARE MEN REALLY CLEVERER THAN WOMEN?
http://m.paipai.fm/r6211939_u11816201/
A focus on a factors such as the ability to quickly grasp a complex concept, verbal reasoning skills and creativity - some of the key ingredients of intelligence - revealed the male teenagers had IQs that were an average of 3.63 points higher. The average person has an IQ of around 100.

此项测试着重对学生快速理解复杂概念、语言推理能力和创造力等几项智力指标进行了考察。结果发现，男学生的智商平均高出3.63分。普通人的智商水平在100分左右。
1楼。

“A focus on a factors……”应该改成“A focus on factors……”。

PS：此文中第一句“It is research that……”翻译为“研究表明”合适吗？个人觉得这个句型应该来自It is said that……， 但是以前没见过这样用的。研究表明的话用According to a research/A research shows that 吧。

我觉得其实你纠正的第二个句子，本来没有错
谁捡走了我的玻璃鞋,寻找遗失的玻璃鞋.
I am looking for the missing glass-shoes who has picked it up
--> Who found my glass slippers, I am looking for my lost glass slippers
没有必要一定按中文的顺序。。。。。。

十个好笑的英文笑话http://m.paipai.fm/r6203045/

一、我是单身汉
　　
Jack feell off his bicycle and got hurt. A beautiful young nurse asked him to fill forms. Jack finished them and gave them back."Anything else?" The nurse asked. "Yes,"Jack thinks for a while and said,"I'm a bachelor."


Jack fell off his bicycle and got hurt.
A beautiful young nurse asked him to fill in the forms.
Jack thought for a while
I am a bachelor ——should be "I am single"





四、别无选择
　　
One day,Eve asked Adam,"Doyou really love me?"

　　
Adam said helplessly,"Do I have any other choice?"
                                               
Do I have any other choices?

【any other choice 是正确的。如果是复数，应该用这样的形式，any of the other choices。欢迎交流讨论。O(∩_∩)O】


The Doctor Knows Better   

　　
A man was hit by a cab in the street. He was brought to the hospital.
                                                                         
He was taken to the hospital.

　　
His wife who was standing up by his bed, said to the doctor: "I think that he is very ill."
       
His wife who was stanking by his bed saide to the doctor: " I think he is badly injured. (it is not very proper that you use ill to describe that somebody is hurt by the car. The chinese version is 伤得很厉害)

　　

http://m.paipai.fm/r6201127/ 很好的英文自我介绍


my major is electronic.and i got my bachelor degree after my graduation in the year of 2003.

My major was electronic and I got my bachelor degree in 2003. 时态一致

I spend most of my time on study,i have passed CET4/6 . and i have acquired basic knowledge of my major during my school time.

I spent most of my time on studying when I was in the university. I have passed CET4/6 already and acquired basic knowledge of my major during my school time.【spend ...on sth ,spend ...(in) doing sth  所以，我认为，原句没有错误。欢迎交流讨论，好吗？O(∩_∩)O】

In July 2003, I began work for a small private company as a technical support engineer in QingDao city.Because I'm capable of more responsibilities, so I decided to change my job.

In July 2003, i began to work for a small private company as......in the city of Qingdao. Though the work gave me lots of experiences, I decided resign because I thought i was competent to more challenging jobs.（除了有语病，这段实际上一点也不好。如果你认为不好的工作经历不适宜在自我介绍中说）

And in August 2004,I left QingDao to BeiJing and worked for a foreign enterprise as a automation software test engineer.Because I want to change my working environment,I'd like to find a job which is more challenging


In August 2004, I left for Beijing from Qingdao and started to work for a........because I would like to work in an new environment and take a more challenging job.【我认为，这个from，加得有些多余。leave A for B 完全可以准确的表达离开哪，去哪了。Thank you all the same!】

Moreover是表达递进关系的词语，与前面你的工作经历完全不相干，逻辑发生了错误。感觉前面的工作经历尚未交代清楚，后面已经开始说为什么想到摩托罗拉来面试了。

不改了，这个英文自我介绍有待提高，尚未达到很好的水平

关于Spend的说法，我同意。但原句时态有错。

Left for那个原句用的是Left to，请细看，谢谢。

这篇文章实际上最大的问题是在句子的互相连接和意思表达的问题，例如：Because和So用在一起等，这些错误的纠正请版主细看

我没怎么认真看，不过，一楼有句是不用改的。the sentence comes from The Flight of Cranes written by Tagore

如果你为着错过夕阳而哭泣，那么你就要错群星了
If you weeped for the missing sunset,you would miss all the shining stars
--> If you cry for the sunset you've missed, then you would miss all the shining stars.

the origanal sentence is "if you shed tears when you miss the sun, you also miss the stars."
本文来自派派小说论坛 ：http://m.paipai.fm/r6231713_u12108696/

帖子名称  [中英对照英文笔记]实用的生活美语～每天多学一点点
帖子链接 http://m.paipai.fm/r6212530/
mistakes所在的楼层 正文错误
指出错误，并改正。
Don´t bother, I just reading it fast because it´s so bad.
应该改成read，不是reading，因为没有be动词，哪里来的ing

引用

引用第11楼zhangyianna于2010-07-26 10:35发表的 回 2楼(yufafa) 的帖子 :
我觉得其实你纠正的第二个句子，本来没有错
谁捡走了我的玻璃鞋,寻找遗失的玻璃鞋.
I am looking for the missing glass-shoes who has picked it up
--> Who found my glass slippers, I am looking for my lost glass slippers
没有必要一定按中文的顺序。。。。。。

我觉得第二句译的也不好，who found my glass slippers,似乎这样的句型，是Chinglish吧。反倒不如原句了。

改人家的日子挺缺德的。可惜我缺PB。有14个错误吧，慷慨点，70PB来给我花一花。

[English note] 三无日记，絮絮叨叨，发疯言论和白日梦
http://m.paipai.fm/r6209223/
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A q is coming. (是说阿Q来了？）
--> Ah Q is here. (英语的阿多数翻译成Ah避免和A混淆）


Don't let others take you down!haha, need to my persevere dream, and be nice to my own.
--> Don't let others take you down! Haha, I need to pursue my dreams and be nice to myself.


Okay, Valentine, I am lonely.
--> Alright, I feel lonely on Valentine's Day.


Two things, that friend's problem.
--> My friend has two problems.


I really don't wanna talk about it, even don't wanna remember in the dairy.
--> I really don't want to talk about it, and I don't want to even write it in my diary.


I treat her as a friend, maybe I am sensitive, maybe her had a bad temper, I don't know, I just think this is a stupid thing.
--> I treat her as my friend. I might be too sensitive, or maybe she has a bad temper. I don't know but I just find that this is a stupid problem.


And there is also a little chemistry thing in Valentines, I know I also have a problem in this group, but I never fell such stronger today.
--> And there was a little chemistry going on in my group on Valentine's Day. I had felt it much stronger today.


hrrr..Valentine, my boyfriend is working and studying...Sad.
--> Hrrr... Its Valentine's Day but my boyfriend is still working and studying... Sad.


BUT!! My plan is on the table, and it is going well so far.
--> BUT!! I've written my plan on the table and it is going well so far. （你写的方式比较常用在诗词歌词，正常写法不是那样的。）


I hope I can find some special.
--> I hope I can find someone / something special. （你找人还是找东西？）


Well, my job, and intern, is planning and applying,too.
--> Well, I am planning to apply for my job or internship.


Hope I am lucky. I need some power in these things.
--> I hope that I am lucky. I need some luck in these things.
--> Hopefully, I am lucky. I need some luck in these things.


I think I have to buy a car, this is not a multiple-choice.
--> I think I have no choice but to buy a car.


In one word, ask people help is necessary, but if no one can help you, or you don't wanna this person's help, just ask yourself.
--> I conclude that it is necessary to seek help from people. However, if no one can help you, or you do not wish to seek help from a certain person, then you can only help yourself.

三无日记，絮絮叨叨，发疯言论和白日梦
http://m.paipai.fm/r6209223/
楼主
"maybe her had a bad temper, " (lines 4-5)
"maybe she has a bad temper"
"but I never fell such stronger today. " (6)
"but i never felt stronger today"(没看懂什么意思,应该是这样)
"ask people help " (second to last)
"asking people for help"
"you don't wanna this person's help" (last line)
"you don't want this person's help"