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Original sentence: oh, my god, i must to stay at home until school term beginning. i am so boring, my dad had go to workplace, and my mum will go there day after tomorrow. when my mum go there, i will be one person stay at home.
A few suggestions and corrections for you.
1.) When you are writing don't use spoken English. Eg. "oh, my god".
2.) Always use proper punctuation and remember to capitalize your pronouns when writing. Eg. "I" not "i".
3.)Remember that words ending in "-ing" are supposed to be used to show possession. The noun used in the sentence much show ownership. The sentence "I'm so boring." is correct; however, I believe you're trying to say, "I'm (I am) so bored." meaning that you are having the feeling of boredom.
So after those suggestions your writing should look a little more like this....
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Corrected sentence: I must stay at home until the school term begins. I'm so bored because my dad has to go to work and my mum will also be going there in two days. When she goes, I will be home alone.
That's it for now :)
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